Please pass my comments along to your daughter:

• A+ on the overall effort. Takes a lot of guts to out yourself out there like this. Ignore the haters!
• Great use of different locations. I liked the contrast of inside verses and outside nighttime refrain. Great for continuity of the story.
• Lip syncing was actually pretty good. I could tell that the "singers" weren't just going through the motions.
• Camera angles were great on the shots in the street, and getting out of the car. Provided an interesting visual engagement with the audience.
• The girl in the street who seemed unsure of herself actually added to my enjoyment. I like that no one took themselves too seriously. Main dude was a obviously not a gangsta, and it was awesome!

Ways to improve:

• Lighting. Try to make sure faces have enough light to be seen well, even if the background is dark.
• I could nitpick the lyrics, but it's a school project so who cares! Good incorporation of necessary terms, maybe try to fit the rhythm and rhyme of the music a little closer?
• I really can't think of much else. I thoroughly enjoyed this!

(My Credentials - former drama student, lead in high school senior musical, actor in numerous plays and musicals in college and community theater. )